woa
Here i am cruisin newgrounds for a song i got in mind, and i stumble on this. Hahaha i actually have a song written to this same beat!
Guess you beat me to it.
The lyrics arnt bad, but that reverb is killin it man. Try placin it on like the key parts of the rhyme, like maybe every 2 or 4 bars. It makes it pop a little, but if you do it the whole time, it looses its effect and sounds... Not to be harsh... But wak.
Keep it up though man.